BOOM!! American army keep attacking the land,
although the war is over, they still don’t want to let any human live on this
the land, Peter Lee is hide in the place that he always hide, his anger remains
a ticking bomb, will explode every time, he is ready he stand up and get on the
fighter which he found in the military camp, then start after he fighter take
off, there have maybe twenty different fighter follow him, these are the people
who just like Peter Lee, they all have the same purpose-revenge of the United
States after a long fly they already arrive the United States some of them drop
the bomb and it really work, the place they attacking is the biggest military camp
in United States this really make American government alarmed and angrily because it really hurt them a lot, then Peter
Lee and his partner fly back to their home land and celebrate for the first
win, they start to plan the second attack and train the people, after few days
when they hear the radio, they feel surprise he told this to Peter Lee and he
feel happy and excite because they are all ready…
Your had a very interesting rising action, the rising action full of many actions and let the audience image a lot in your story, I really want to know what will happen next! good job! - Daniel Tsao
ReplyDeletePeter lai:
ReplyDeleteIt seem like the main character is me. You use my name to writhe the story? Well that is good cause I like to be a hero
Peter lee