In my story Peter Lee is a main character and he want to become
stronger to fight with the American army to revenge them, so this is a conflict
that Men vs. Men and he also have to survive in the environment that the people
have to fight for the and this also is a conflict. In the story for the biggest
conflict, there will come out lot of different small conflict, for example, he
want to revenge the army and fight with them, this one is the biggest conflict
in the story, but for this there come out some smaller conflict.
In
second paragraph, Peter Lee might meet some people, doesn’t matter that person
is good for Peter Lee or he will hurt him that is a conflict men vs. men, and
the place is on the earth, so the weather might very changeful so this become
men vs. nature, during the training Peter Lee might have some problem with himself
maybe he should stop this or keep doing the intent – fight with the army. In the
story conflict in the most important part and also the most interesting part,
it makes people to think more about it and that is the function of the
conflict.
You had a great story and conflicts, I like the part that North Korea lost the war in the future! However, I think you can still improve a little bit on your grammer, it might be much better!- Daniel Tsao
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